Before we submitted our boards to YCN, we've decided to critique our boards with Sean, Dan and Grace. Just so we know the imagery is appropriate and the text makes sense. I also want to know if our concept is pitched correctly.
Impact page was fine, large image, logo, impactful, draws the audience in.
Some alterations to the text is needed, doesn't really pitch the concept, and it doesn't really make sense. Probably down to my poor english skills, and I was in a rush. However, Sean, Grace and Dan combed through it, and altered it so it made more sense.
Another page is good imagery, however the text also needed a few adjustments to allow it to flow and read better. Just general grammar issues.
The page for the website page was good, bold and impactful, showed the website, doesn't need text.
Plenty of grammar issues on the printed proposal page, the imagery was good, and strong. Just needed to sort the text out, again.
Text alterations are needed. Tweaked the image's alignment to it fits better.
The final board showing how Champneys work in the environment was fine. A few alterations in the text was needed, but it wasn't too much to do.
The final boards will be included in the submission post, with all the amendments included.
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